It wasn’t
all that long ago, brother, when we promised undying friendship. I thought that being there for you was all I
ever wanted. To watch you grow up,
choose a bride, build a home. I’d never
be too far away, never leave you to walk this road alone. And everything I did
was always for your good. All my life I’ve loved you, protected you, fought for
you.
Brother, I
would have died for you.
But you changed. So did I.
Now you lie
before me with a bullet in your chest.
The
gun still smoking in my hand.
woa. was not expecting that. this is really powerful, bekah. well done. :)
ReplyDeleteThe descriptions all flow so well to pull in, and then smash every expectation at the end. I love the way you highlight the pivotal moment with indentation, too. :)
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness... this was seriously good.... wow... I'm very impressed! And I did not see this coming.. :)
ReplyDelete0.o
ReplyDeleteWow...
That was seriously intense! And amazing!!
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ReplyDeleteThat is SO sad, but it was very well written!!!
ReplyDeleteLast two lines. Very good.
ReplyDeletethis is incredible.
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