About 2:00, lunch rush is dwindling.
The short lady with
the orange glasses cuts in front of the line.
“What kind of soups do you have?”
They’re listed right
up here.
“Well, I can’t read them.”
Oh, we have chicken
noodle, broccoli cheddar, toma
“Which has the lowest calories?”
Chicken noodle. Would you
like a bowl or a cup?
“Could I get it in a salad bowl? It’s all he’s eating.”
I don’t think so,
there’s only the group soup.
“nothing bigger? How much is that?”
14.99
“Just for soup?! I mean, soup is water, with some stuff in
it.”
wow. this is really good! the dialogue seems perfectly natural, it doesn't feel squeezed to fit into 100 words. well done.
ReplyDeleteThis made me chuckle. :)
ReplyDeleteoh thanks :) i'm glad it didn't come across that way because i definitely had to cut a lot out
ReplyDeleteThis is genius. And I love the last line so much!!
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