Friday, May 4, 2012

5.4.12 Failed Mission


The cockpit is cold.  Icy cold.  We’ve taken too many hits and Space is unforgiving.  The instruments have started shutting down.

My navigator breathes heavily.  He hasn’t had the training.  Doesn’t know how to fight the lack of oxygen.

“Hang in there, buddy,” I say, but I’m trying not to panic.  I’ve seen this before in the vids: we freeze without shields.

We’re heading for the planet.  The fleet’s too far to offer salvation.
He’s shaking, suffocating. 
The atmosphere is thick.  We’re going to burn. 
 He turns to me.  Eyes wide.

 “I’m sorry.  So sorry.  May God be with you.”


8 comments:

  1. Oh my goodness... This is so darn good..

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  2. Very nice. Ender's Game influence? If so, I highly approve.

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  3. haha. thanks guys. I almost chucked this one about a million times today...
    and yup, totally an enders game influence. :D

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  4. The great thing about DrabDayMoMay being a month long is that if you don't like your drabble one day, you can try again the next. It doesn't have to be brilliant every time. :)

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  5. Matza, this is REALLY good, I LOVE it!!!

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  6. Wow, this is great! And double thumbs up for Ender's Game influence!

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  7. this gave me goosebumps. well done. :)

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