The scent of fear and rust clung to the air of the crowded
bullet train. The black synth-leather
boots of the sec guards squeaked crisply on the corrugated floor as they made
their way in my direction. I knew they’d come looking for me. Decked in padded body
armor and sleek riot helmets, they made their way up from the back of the
train, checking each commuter’s ID card along the way. Hands trembled as they held up cards to be
confirmed by the guards’ handheld scanners.
I pulled my tan overcoat tighter against my body, as if I could
disappear into it. My forged ID card could
fool the cameras and crowd scans, but I knew it would be useless up close. But I also knew that the security screen for
this sector should still be down for another six minutes and forty-one
seconds. That should buy me enough time,
time enough to reach the next station, to find a small bus to a remote,
uninteresting town, where no one would think to look for me, where I could be
nobody.
“Your ID sir.” Black boots
filled my vision. I pretended not to
hear.
“Sir?”
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great snapshot scene! although I have to say, I would love to see how this would look in 100 words. I have upmost confidence that you could pull it off as a stand alone drabble.
ReplyDeletethis is great.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bekah, i think i'll take you up on that.
ReplyDeleteI like this. Draws you right in and leaves the reader wanting more, as it should.
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